Posts on Saturdays are all about amateur English Web Novels that are published online, usually on royalroadl.com. Sometimes the series covered will be absolutely amazing, other times I’m going to roast them for their mistakes.
Hey all I’m back with a review of a series I was asked to do much earlier this year during my Hiatus for this week’s Serial Saturday. It’s The Undead World by Donkereweg!
Plot: This is a typical Isekai/LitRPG but it’s much too dark just for the sake of being dark. The current big go to genre word in the fiction community is “Grimdark” and every newbie author is just tagging it into their stories just because it’s the new fad. Like Twilight and all it’s ilk, most Grimdark stories are utter trash and this one is not much different.
Example: Not only does the MC get NTRed in the first few chapters, which is always a mark in the negative for me, but he loses his first friend he makes after dying. Why? Just because the author felt like being a dick and trying to be dark. There are ways of creating conflict without killing off every other named character or making every MC an edgelord. Take some of the classics like Lord of the Rings. Of the main characters only one dies for good, and even then it’s after being a dick and betraying the party that said character dies.
Characters: Our main dude Dantalian or whatever he goes by now is not interesting to read about and about as 3-dimensional as a sheet of a paper. The rest of the cast is no better, and most character are either killed off or just forgotten because they’re no longer important at all to the Author. Heck even the weapon-smith that Dantalian meets in the Undead City is unnamed in a later chapter. Classic sign of laziness by the author right there.
Grammar: For being a non native English speaker and this being their first work the author’s writing here is about the only good thing I can give this story a plus for. It’s not amazing grammar, but I’ve read worse. Still needs a lot of work, and honestly it could use a few editing passes at the very minimum just for grammar.
Overall: Steer clear, it’s a blatant attempt at trying to get into the writing business by jumping on the latest genre fad, Grimdark.
For those who like: Terrible Stories, Twilight.
Not for those who don’t like: Either of the above.
Hey all I’m back again with more of Lars’ shenanigans for this week’s Serial Saturday. It’s Upheaval Chapters 9-16 by Hodhandr!
Plot: Again like the last set of chapters this is really slow and much more Slice of Life than action oriented. That said there is action, just not a bunch of it. Honestly if you want anything resembling a plot, or action you’d best look elsewhere.
Characters: We get introduced to a couple new faces, but they aren’t very consequential in the grand scheme of things.
Overall: An okay set of chapters, but like the last severely lacking in a driving force in the plot or much action.
Hey all I’m back with another LitRPG for this week’s Serial Saturday. It’s Upheaval Chapters 0-8 by Hodhandr!
Plot: The plot is really quite haphazard, and doesn’t really go anywhere. It’s very much a Slice of Life series that has LitRPG elements. That’s not a bad thing exactly, but for some they’ll only get pissed off that the story doesn’t really ever progress. If you were expecting it to be like most other LitRPGs with tons of action and adventure, you will be very disappointed.
Characters: Lars is our main character and he’s very much an airhead. He does things that most would either find horrific or does stuff that most people would think is really stupid. Granted that the plot allows for some ridiculous things, but honestly I don’t like the main character all that much. The rest of the cast is fairly boring at the moment, though it does get a bit better later on.
Grammar: It’s passable, but it can be grating at times. If you are expecting quality work here in terms of grammar, you will be disappointed, but not to the point of wanting to throw something out or through a window.
Overall: An okay series, but it’s not that great. If you’re bored there are worse series to read out there, but there’s also better series to read.
For those who like: LitRPGs, Slice of Life, Fantasy, Airhead Lead Characters.
This week for Serial Saturday I’m back with the second set of chapters in Rhaegar’s first novel. It’s Azarinth Healer Chapters 10-18 by Rhaegar!
Plot: The plot moves on pretty quickly and we finally get to see Ilea really put her powers into action against things other than Drakes. And it’s quite a blast to read. That’s all I’ll say, because if you enjoyed the story up to here, this set of chapters isn’t going to change that opinion.
Characters: We get to meet a few new characters in this set of chapters, but my favorite is Ellie easily. That being said Ilea is still the star of the show and I can’t say that it’s a bad thing since she’s such a fun character.
Overall: A fun and very good set of chapters in this series written by a complete amateur.
This week for Serial Saturday I’m back with another series I got asked to review by it’s author. It’s Azeal Neralum by Kazi.
Plot: Let me get this out of the way, I would normally have never bothered with reading this series, and I must have either missed the Grimdark genre tag or it was added after I had bookmarked it as a potential series to read. Either way I find the overly dark nature of the “genre” usually makes stories I tend to despise. Azeal Neralum isn’t an exception to my distaste. I honestly don’t enjoy the overly dark fantasy epic craze that’s seem to come up in the past decade. Even one of my most adored series, Mistborn, is a bit too dark for me. While I’ve read the entire thing once, I probably won’t ever do that again due to that darkness. However other than the tone there are other serious issues I have with Azeal Neralum. Mainly the constant switching of points of view that is happening, and the lack of forward progress with regards to the main character. I don’t care about some random fort getting slaughtered, what does it have to do with the main character? If the answer to that question is “nothing” in the next 30 chapters I’ve just wasted my time reading extraneous world building that could’ve been experienced through the main characters point of view instead.
Characters: Azeal is a mediocre main character, he’s got nothing extremely likable about him that makes me interested in him as a character and the rest of the cast is just as bad. It’s even worse with the most recent chapters that the author wrote. I don’t give a rat’s ass about some “hero” or gallant general that is dying if he’s being introduced out of the blue and has no noticeable connection with the protagonist. If I had met that character 100 chapters before and grew attached to him I might feel a bit of sympathy over his death, but the way the author the author brings up these characters out of the blue is more than a bit annoying.
Grammar: The grammar is okay, but the writing itself seems off. I can’t put it into words much better than it feels just a bit wrong when I read it. Either the way the author writes is grating on my internal sense of how a book is supposed to read, or the issue is something else, but I just find it’s “flow” to be not pleasing to the eye.
Overall: If for some reason you love dark fantasy, Azeal Neralum might be up your alley after a few editing passes have been done by the author. Otherwise steer clear of this.
This week for Serial Saturday I’m covering another new series. It’s Azarinth Healer Chapters 01-09 by Rhaegar!
Plot: The plot is pretty great, and considering that the author states upfront that he’s a complete amateur it’s refreshingly well written. It is a LitRPG mixed with Isekai elements, but don’t expect our hero to be going off to slay demon lords to save the world. I won’t spoil it, but it’s a very fun read and these first few chapters are a great start.
Characters: We really only get to meet Ilea in these first few chapters, and that’s okay as she’s quirky and intelligent and very much a badass. The cast does fill out later on.
Grammar: The grammar is very well done, and given that the author went through the trouble of revising their errors out of the early chapters is a very good sign for the longevity of the series, at least in my opinion.
Overall: A fun read, and well worth the read.
For those who like: LitRPGs, Isekai, Fantasy, Magic, Action, Adventure, Female Leads, Interesting Plot, Good Grammar.
This week for Serial Saturday I’m back with a series that just had it’s first volume published. It’s Siphon Chapters 1-36 by Jay Boyce!
Plot: The plot is pretty great, and while it’s nothing groundbreaking or revolutionary it is a fun read. It reminds me of series like Kuma Kuma Kuma Bear, in that it’s more Slice of Life than anything action oriented. That isn’t to say there aren’t action parts, but they are few and far between. The plot starts off a little slow, and Jade our main character is apt to break out in song which can be a little grating, but given her background I don’t find it super annoying.
Characters: The entire cast is pretty awesome, but Jade our lead is definitely the star of the show. My favorite side character is either Camille or Stephen, but I’ve got a hard time choosing which.
Overall: A fun and lighter read than some of the LitRPG series out there in the English market so far. If you enjoy Slice of Life Siphon will be an awesome choice.
For those who like: Slice of Life, Isekai, LitRPGs, Fantasy, Magic, Female Leads, Excellent Plot, Fantastic Cast of Characters.
Not for those who don’t like: Any of the above, but you should give this a try.